by MischieviousMya Oct 3, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
love is
Fear is something i held inside, |
by x.Athame.x
The fist two stanzas are very nice, but then the flow changes for the second two. This throws the rhythm off a little. The last one is fine. I would, personally, suggest keeping the rhythm a little more consistent, but its still a nice poem. I also think you have a good idea here, but need to elaborate on it. Move into a little more depth. Overall this is a nice poem. 3/5 |