Wow i love this poem. it had so much imagery. i especially loved the stanza "Sometimes i want to run with closed eyes
So i could visualize serenity in the middle of my screams
Hide behind the roots of sacred lies
To feel soothing thorns in my everlasting dreams"

keep up the good work

sophie:)

ps. thanx 4 the comment i really appreciate it.

I could visualize everything in my mind as i read your poem.nicely written..keep writing ..i gave you a 5!

'Loving you was so bitter for my heart
Yet better than not being loved at all'

Brilliant!!!

Michelle

YAY! New poem!! hehe. I LOVED THIS!!!! My fave stanza was that last one...I dunno..for some reason it reminded me of...me...? Keep it up!!

love always,

[[ Poetess ]]

This is a great poem...A lot of feeling in it! I love it! You are really talented!

My favourite stanza is the first one:
Sometimes i want to get over everything
Just leave every moment far too behind
Run away from the monster of my past
But somehow angels have never been kind

I know what it feels like...I feel the same!

All the best and thanks for the comments on my poems! :)

Lysette x x x (~Miss Poetic~)

Its short but i feel every word of it, you piece your work together so well i really loved this line
Loving you was so bitter for my heart
It really says something to me, great read xox sam 5/5

A very Beautiful sad poem !
its so true ,guess most of us feel like this in our life ,emotions can be beautiful and painful at same time.

"Sometimes i want to run with closed eyes
So i could visualize serenity in the middle of my screams
Hide behind the roots of sacred lies
To feel soothing thorns in my everlasting dreams"

FABULOUS LINES !!

Sometimes i push my soul to jump
When there is no one to break my fall
Loving you was so bitter for my heart
Yet better than not being loved at all

awesome penned, though sad but well express emotions.....breathtaking!

bert ~

It's wonderful! It's just too good! Great work!

Amazing job, loved the detailing and emotion keep it up. 5/5

This is again a gud 1 from u dear. sorry i m late to comment. but i always appreciate ur work. keep writing.

Wow this was so friggin amazing i really liked it..
good job..
5/5 for me.
lia

Hi Dude,

Long Time since I visited the site. You have improved your style very much and this is a fantastic poem, but I see that you are still sticking to the short ones.

Great Concept in this poem and good imagination. Dreams are always an interesting idea.

I read the poem again and there is a suggestion from me.

You have used the words "run from the monster of past" twice in the poem. In the first stanza as well as in the last stanza. Maybe you could have thought of some other line in the first stanza because I feel that the line matches good in the last stanza.

Heyyyyy! OmG this is Absolutely breathtaking!!!!
I love the idea of the poem..and the rhyme was so cute!
Althou I dun Prefer ur sad poems..well u kno why =P, but I totally love this one
ExTrAOrDiNaRy!!
loved it so much

and sorry for the late comment
Take care and Best Of Luck
NemO xxxxxxx

So goooooooood!

Hey arl i think i can sort of relate to this poem to a point. very deep and touching keep it up xx

Hey thanks for the r/r/c this was a GREAT poem! it was very sad and touching, and i loved the detailing...keep up the great work. i have a ? u said..u wish u could b my next date..:P...why u say that..thnx tho:)

This is a really good poem, very sad but good. I like the words you used in it and thank you for commenting on my poem.

Wow! This was really good. The things that chase us in our dreams is hard to run from. Excellent job!