I thought it flowed perfect. And I loved the style. I really loved this one. Its my favourite from you so far. Really paints a picture and tells you about the "emo kid" yet still keeping it simple and easy to read.
I loved it. Really Really did. Flawless and interesting.

Shin, this one is truly AMAZING. You were right, I loved this one. It was so good. The flow was well written into the poem.. if you knew what you were reading. Nice work! Woot! 4.7/5

Ohh. I've never seen this style poem before. Very creative and intresting. None the less though, I thought it actually flowed well, and really made sense. Your wording was perfect.

This is a new style to me. Very well done! You truly are amazing and continue to amaze me with your skills every day. Keep it up! 5/5 =]

-Jenna.

Wow, this poem sure has a strange rhyme theme, which made it unique and different. Great job.

-This wasn't as good as your other ones, the message didn't seem to be strong enough.
Keep it up^-^

The flow was actually not bad at all for these types of poem, I can definatly appreciate these kind of forms of writting because I used to do them alot and they're very hard. Very interesting topic, you seemed to do a pretty nice job of getting the meaning through although it took a few reads, keep working and thanks for presenting the oppertunity to read a very unique poem.

Ooh, I like it! It was very interesting and I did like the flow.. It went quite smoothly for my liking.. The descriptions were good too! Nicely done! 5/5

This is really good I loved it. Even if I didn't understand the style of it lol. 5/5

Niiice poem, haha i dont even get it, i've bee going around bagging all the other "poets" bagging emo's. but urs has the only poem that i dont understand, i think ur poem makes sense. but i guess not enough for me to understand :) good poem keep up the great work