I really really loved dis one cos it had a story to it and maintained the rhythm of the story and poem throughout. Da guy in and out of jail reminded me ov sum1, cos ov da stupidness and half cracked tooth.
Kinda cynical though, in that the giuy who really didn't deserve happiness wins.
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I felt that the first stanza was weak compared to the rest of the poem, but I did enjoy the flow to it. Good job! Jpoet*

Wow, i'm so impressed. this poem has a lot of meaning and makes questions, also lots of good rhymes. i really enjoyed it, keep it up!
peace, 6th Trinity