Numb

by Natalie   Oct 5, 2006


Dirt trails lead towards regretful mistakes,
Tripping over many cryptic pebble stones,
Looking for sunlight beyond dusty clouds,
Exposing everything except anemic bones.

Yelping out to tree branches surrounding,
Needing shelter for storms soon to come,
Wind brushing past rejecting unfamiliar,
Left with tingling feelings of being numb.

Chaotic thoughts wonder through shrubs,
Pondering wishes which never come true,
Kneeling on two knees with hands on face,
Hoping languished emotions pass through.

6th October 2006
Copyright (C) Natalie

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  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, your poetic description of very good Nat, but you are still missing the flow. It just seems like you describe objects with adjectives that seem obscure. I think there is an essence missing in your poetry. I'm kind of saying, it's choppy, but as an intellectual poem, it's quite good. I guess, what I'm saying is, no true emotions flow through these poems. Lol, sorry Nat, I guess I miss those poems where you use to rant about things, and your sentences seem simple rather than abstract. Hehe, it's only me. I still love your poems SMAWCE sister, and I still think you are an amazing poet!

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Awh, wow Taleee.. You continue to amaze me with every poem I read of yours.. I liked the descriptions and emotion you put into this one.. I could understand it at least =P Nicely done! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by GoodMorning

    This is really good, NatterPatter.

    i love you, i love you, i love you, i love you. remember that, okey?

    *huggles tight*

    keep your head up, booger. stay strong!

    i love you so much. and you deserve the best. you deserve to be happy.

  • 18 years ago

    by Lady Nik

    I really like this poem it's really good. nice work shanik

  • 18 years ago

    by Misstress

    "Yelping out to tree branches surrounding,"
    this line pretty said so much along with the good choice of words and flow.
    5/5 for sure.

    God Bless!

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