Well love, in truth, I wasn't blown away by this poem. I think it was because of the structure. You've got a lot of odd stanzas, and I'm just used to even ones. Also, I think some of the rhyming was a little...confused. I feel really bad about saying these things about you're poem, especially since you've been so nice about mine, but this is what i think. and sadly, i'm going to have to give it a 2/5. I'm really really sorry.

Brad

P.S. Thanks for commenting on my poems, and I'm sorry for the first stanza of 'Life doesn't always work out the way you think' wasn't as good as you'd hoped, but I'm glad you told me. It's nice to get ACTUAL opinions and advice.

Well, if this was meant for a song, it should get a better rating then 2. I am also a lyricist, and this is pretty good. I can see what the other guy was saying but this is a song and not a full fledged poem.