Hmm... this is interesting.

It seems like a girl (or boy), the narrarator, sees someone, and starts to just imagine what it would be like if this person suddenly became a part of there life and helped them for the better.

For that idea, I think this is a great concept. If it is about something else, I would love to know exactly what you meant when you wrote it?

Anyways, it's a good poem the first time you read it, and the second (if you read it twice) it seems to get even better. I like it alot ;)

~Scarlett

This is really good...i like that its left so open-ended...kinda kool....thx 4 the comment
andi

Really well done. You d such a great job on your poems. Keep it up.