by Nick who Plays Pool Oct 6, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Returning to the house, set aflame by shame |
Very well written poem, it was deep and intruging, nessa |
Thought a tad repetitive, it shows the same advanced thought process and the use of some vocab words is something that stands out in your poem as I've seen people much older who stick to words spoken in children. I have dark poems, so I'mreading sad ones instead. |
by Deana
Beautifully done excellent metaphors,great job Hawkeye. |
Like I said on the last one, just as great the second time as the first. 5.0 like all your others! ^.^ |
by CrownxClown
Its interesting how you can use flames as the turning point in a human life and use the home as the place of memory to the human mind seeing the turning point in life how simple it is to make a persons life in to a shining heaven or a painful hell.5/5 |