Wow!! Sent shivers running down my spine! This is great though, I love it. The way its written the choice of words... Love it all. 5/5 xx

A very well written piece. the flow was extremely well done and the message dark and delightful. If a poem can be dark and delightful.

Keep up the good work.
Great job.

Happiness
Jeannie

Wow..... creepy, definatly dark. lol

well done the flow was perfect well done, i really enjoyed reading this poem.

~Murder.

Well done, amazing poem. I like your wording, your expressions are really powerful.
Great poem, 5/5
Love Mel

Ha ha!this is really good..amazing..like very breathtaking! Ithink that it is good because of the cobination of unusual words!!

Oh wow. You are truly amazing Darling. And I mean it. This poem blew me away. It actually made me think, after of course the chills went away =P . Keep it up! 5/5 =]

-Jenna.

BRAVO! This is a incredible poem. I could actually feel the deep emotion that you put into it as I read. I think a lot of us find ourselves feeling this way sometimes. Excellent write 5/5

Letty

Wow great job on this poem. i love the words you used for it. wonderful job. so deep and full of emotion. you did an amazing job writing it. keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

I love this poem. It was full of emotion and i liked that. 5/5

Woah, such an excellent write. Such a powerful poem. I love the idea of this poem and the emotion behind it. The flow is perfect and your wording is supurb. A flawless finish. I love your poems. Keep it up. =] 5/5

Tammie x

Wow, this is really good, great word choices, great rhyme, great imagery, what can i say. This piece of writing is flawless. Keep it up, you are great.Cheers.

'Whitey

Strong.. it had a very vivid image.. i liked it.. very great..

5/5
Brandy

Wow

Your theme is very heavy and as a reader I have no clue what is the concept of the poem. The words used are too complex and adds to the heavy feeling especially since no concept can be related to.

But your imagination is good here, better than the "Weakened butterfly" and you have a vision in this poem that the reader can feel and recognize.

It is as if you have felt this feeling and has expressed it so strongly, reader can relate to, but you do not know exactly what is the feeling and it's causes. All this complex thoughts and feelings.. it feels as if frustration was the soul of the poem. (I do not mean to say you were frustrated when writing the poem, plezz understand that I mean that frustration is the theme that I could relate to...)

And I want to seriously see some punctuation in your poems. Please do not assume that everybody interprets the end of a line as a pause. Should it be a comma, semicolon or a fullstop that the reader is supposed to assume? Rhyming is better than "Weakened butterfly".

Try writing longer poems. Your thought process is soo good, do not cut it short for lack of time or words. Come up with lighter concepts for short poems.

I like it!!!!!!

Dark and powerful i can mauch relate to all those feelings above
take care
xoxox

Your poem is very well written it definitly made me think...i look forward to reading some more of your poems................have a wondermous day lol.....~missy~

Wow way dark but a great poem i liked it good job 5/5 for me..

The only bad thing i can find aobut your poetry is that the lines a a little long, so the flow is a little.. confusing.

Other than that this poem is so beautiful and amazing. its awesome. i love it. it shows the life and struggles of so many girls(and guys)
Very Emotive.!!
5|5

x.x:Lauren

You're a really, really good writer. Your stuff is amazing. I realyl enjoyed this one - it struck a nerve somewhere within me. Somewhere deep. Keep up the good work. =]]