Wow, this is an amazing poem. Well it seems like the father has been sleeping in his bed for a year && after the conculsion he was dead but when you started reading it, you kinda knew what it was about. But other then that you did an amazing job.

your very talented keep it up. keep on writing. love always and forever.

Aww, the ending line completely closed the poem, very well too. It's longer then most sad poems, with poets who think that they can write, but you actually can. Good job, hun. 5/5

Awhh, that was so sad sweetie.. It flowed really well, the descriptions were good, the rhymes worked, and the emotion was clear.. Very nicely done, keep it up! 5/5

A sad one, but greatly written, another great poem by a great writer in this site. amazing work, 5/5

Very good. nice flow and very meaningful. Lots of emotion. i really enjoyed it.

I don't understand why anyone would .not. give you a 5/5. This is an amazing poem. I'm adding you to my favorites. Problems:

On:

Will you knock on the door?
Will you greet me with a hug?
Will you drink your coffee every morning
In that one special mug?

I think you should put:
Will you drink your coffee
not the rest... it just flows better :)

On:

You're not coming back
And I won't wake up from this dream
Where did they take you?
It just doesnt seem

Don't forget the ' dosen't*
And it doesn't make a lot of sense...
seem so? i dunno... got confuzzled there.

Everything else:
Perfect.
The flow was totally amazing! The rhyming was excellent. I'm going to give you a 5/5... found only two mistakes... you don't deserve a lower rating for that.
Again Amazing Poem! 5/5
Great Job Babe!

Oh, I just read it over ... and... 'Will you greet me with a hug? its great**** lol... but no problems :)
xvxvxvx Britt xvxvxvx

Hey great poem, i really like it, although it goes on for a bit long.
I really like this stanza.
What is life, anyway?
A curse or illusion?
It's all so complicated
And puts me in confusion

well done 5/5
Love Mel

Wow that was such a beutiful poem..it really got me and touched my heart..my mom passed away an this poem really described how i felt an im sure how other people feel in this situation..keep writting you rock!

This is such a sad poem. I hope this didn't happen to you. If i did then im sorry for your lose.

Aww this is a really sad poem. i'm so sorry if this is true. however you did such a wonderful job writing it! it was full of emotion and the flow and rhyming was good! keep it up! 5/5

~Kristina

Hey. I really like this poem too. It's another really sad one. Sad poems are easiest to write about and connect to though. In terms of the amount of emotion, yet again being represented, you still do a wonderful job. However, if this was my poem (and I know it's not, so feel free to ignore anything and everything I say after this point) I would simply add some '...' Just in two parts though. These two parts seem incomplete somewhat, and yet work fine all at the same time. So I'm thinking adding the '...' will just add some character, almost like leading on a thought and then being distracted by the pain the poem is about. It does alot more than I know how to explain, but anyway, I would put them in these lines:

''Where ever you are,
In my heart, I'll always keep...''
and
"Where did they take you?
It just doesnt seem..."

But it's really not that important. Anyway, point is, I love the way you display your emotion. You've got some good work. Keep it up:)

The ending reallyy hurt,, i mean while reading the poem you can figure out that he's dead but acually saying it hurts ALOT! it's really hard admitting that someone is dead, a person always tends to think that it's a dream and i'll wake up and they'll still be alive,, it hurts like hell!
anyway the poem is skillfully written, i like your choice of words,,
hope to see more of your wonderful work soon,,
keep up the great work,,
take care...
luv,,
haya 3gab =]

Wow...after reading all ur poems...i dont think i have anything to say...except for the usual jaw drop and in my head runs...wow...908710429834789174198710287 outta 5 =)

I love this one and every one of yours that i have read so far, u r very talented... keep it up

Wow..
this is deffinately going to my favorites!
i mean it was wonderful
the way when you had the reader wondering what was going to happen but at the same time you already knew. i got kind of confused but it was wonderful!!!

great job

MUCH LOVE
Brittany Jean Gilbert

Wow..
this is deffinately going to my favorites!
i mean it was wonderful
the way when you had the reader wondering what was going to happen but at the same time you already knew. i got kind of confused but it was wonderful!!!

great job

MUCH LOVE
Brittany Jean Gilbert

Im sorry and i don't know how you can live with it every day i would die by now im so sorry