Very sad and well thought out. You did a great job on this.. the last line really brought the whole poem together and gave a nice effect. Great job on this. 5/5

Iu loved this poem. its realli good. im sorri to hear what ur friend is goin thru n how shes blaming you, i kno exactly how tht feels. keep up th good work
kitty xoxo

This is really good, and i understand the loss of an unborn child, i... well... my boyfriend and i, wound up with me being pregnant, and about 2 months into my pregnancy i went for a check up, and they said that the baby, was none exsistante... and i had allreayd prepped my boyfrinen and myself for us to be haveing a baby... it was.. horrible, anyways, ... long story short, yes, i do cut myself, and yes it does help... but anwyays, yeah a lil big about me so eyah.. uhn, this is a beautoful poem, keep writing, and check out some of my new stuff.. thanks
-Marina

Hey chiq its me... uv changed but i luv ur poems
tash xo

Yo dis is straight up 5/5. You killed dis poem. You described da scene very well and u just strait up murdered dis poem

I changed my mind,, this is my favorite poem uve written, as i said ur a great writer,, i loved the ending:

she's laying on the ground now in a pool of her own blood
she's been hurt so many times she should have never fell in love
i turn around in shock coz finally i see
the woman lying on the ground, "oh my god, she's me!"

perfect ending,,greatly penned,, definetly 5/5
Janaynay