I think your rhyme sceme was a little off at the end...but overall a good job! Jpoet*

I thought it was beautiful. Its a ahame when your first real love turns out to be painful. great job.

I really think it was great!! It showed how you truly felt.. The rhyming fell apart though

Wow this was sooo awesome.
its brilliant!!
ur an amazing writter 5/5

Full of emotions,and what is great with this poem is that, for sure many out there can relate to this one.
A good read once again.

"Lucky is the man who is the first love of a woman,
but luckier is the woman who is the last love of a man."

Hmm... another nice one of yours. The one thing that I don't like about it is the fact that the rhyme falls apart toward the end. That breaks up the read for me. Otherwise this is an absolutely wonderful write, that is very full of emotion. 4/5

Kind Regards,
Luna

That was like a story really beautiful and heartelt xx

Wow, that was awesome.

I thought it was really good, keep it up

This was an amazing write, the rhyming scheme was good throughout, tho got a bit forced towards the end, but maybe that was just me, i loved all the emotions that you placed carefully into this poem, im sorry if this is true, but i can totally relate to 'first love's ' being ruined. Inspiring peice, keep it up..
Please read and comment on some of my poems, that would be much appreciated.. Kirsty xxx

That is so beautiful

Awwwwwww beautiful writing =] its so real and I love poems like this. 5/5

This is truly sad. The words really touched me. You have again penned a beautiful poem. Keep writing these beautiful poems.

Love
Letty