Tears Whisper {Double Etheree}

by Lu   Oct 9, 2006


Etheree
The poetry form, Etheree, consists of 10 lines of 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10 syllables.
Double Etheree: 1, 2, 3, 4, 5, 6, 7, 8, 9, 10, 10, 9, 8, 7, 5, 4, 3, 2, 1
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Tears
whisper
on my cheek
pink tainted trails
flood of stinging rain
walls built, broken by pain
arm in arm with black shadows
veil of sadness, clouds happiness
heart drowning, river of sadness flows
wanting to hear I'm sorry, just one time

love's piercing edges tearing at my soul
heart beating, to a sad teardrop tune
waiting for words that never come
looking for truth in blank eyes
sleepless nights wondering
does your heart regret
letting me leave
as my eyes
whisper
tears

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  • 16 years ago

    by Beautiful Chaos

    Tears
    whisper
    on my cheek
    pink tainted trails

    ^I love this opening Luanne, it reminds me of one of my favorite painting.

    While I enjoyed the whole piece, the second half was my favorite, it flowed so nicely and touched on thoughts I have had myself.

    Great write!

  • 18 years ago

    by Alexis

    What a wonderful poem! It shows so much depth of emotion and I am in awe of you.

  • 18 years ago

    by Reborn Rival

    You should write a biography on a serious note! The world needs to know what an amazing mind and heart you have 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Timothy r

    Congrats on poem #100 Luanne, the last 5 lines ring out in my mind. This is a poem that will stay with the reader for a very long time. Timothy r

  • 18 years ago

    by Twisted Heart

    Bravo. Very well done on this one. The emotional pull powerful.

    Great job.

    Happiness
    Jeannie

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