by Carmen Oct 9, 2006
category :
Love, romance /
lost love
You can stare up into the endless night sky, |
Great poem...lovely work...i loved the thoughtful use of metaphors...n the poem is good as it is...n i loved the last two lines n m not all that sure about the way it flowed though...but u've certainly done a good job with this one.. |
Wonderful job on this. it had a really nice flow. great work. 5/5 keep up the good work. |
I think you could have made this one a little better, some lines are too long for the flow to stay right, and some are to short... I try to help: |
by Letty
Very powerful message conveyed in this poem. I loved it. I was immediately pulled into this poem from the beginning to the end. I only have one suggestion though: |
Very good. |