Great peom 5/5

Whoa i loved how you ended it, lol, it was one of them poems you leave the reader hanging on for a chapter 2... lol... 5/5...

First off: 5/5. I really like the metaphor in this poem. With that said, I have a suggestion.
"Things happen, as they do now,
This anger, pain, and jealousy I will not allow."

The rhythym is a little shaky here; consider changing it to something like this:
"Things happen, as they always do now,
This anger, pain, and jealousy I will not allow."
Other than that, I thought the rhythym was great. Good job.

Another amazing poem! My only suggestion for this is to separate it into stanzas of 4 lines each. It wiull make the poem easier for the reader's eyes--- My favorite part: But this star is gone.... This star has moved on.... --- =D keep up the great work!

xxEvilAngelxx

This is another love poem I can relate to believe it or not... eros can be equally as mischievous with both sexes

Very good.

"You have forgotten this star, but you know whats worse?"

'Whats' should be 'what's' (note the apostrophe). Yeah, I notice small things like that, haha.

Very powerful message conveyed in this poem. I loved it. I was immediately pulled into this poem from the beginning to the end. I only have one suggestion though:

You come back, thinking everything will be fine...

I think you should change You to You'll

that is all. Other then that I think that this was a perfect piece, Great job! 5/5

Letty

I think you could have made this one a little better, some lines are too long for the flow to stay right, and some are to short... I try to help:

You can stare up into the night sky,
See bright stars, resembling my eyes,
They are shining with the light of hope,
Whatever happens, I will cope.
As you stare up into that sky,
I drift on, still wondering why?
Things happen, as they do now.
Anger and pain, I will not allow.
Look at the stars, remember us.
Our perfect love, now turned to dust.
You found yourself another light.
Another girl, to test a different flight.

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You found yourself another star.
I watch hopeless from afar.
*************

So many stars, in this big universe.
You have forgotten this star, what's worse?
Your spark in your new fling will burn out.
You'll think of me and forget all doubt.
You'll remember the glimmer, the shine.
You'll come back, thinking everthing's fine.

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You'll remember the glimmer, the shine.
You'll come back, wanting to be mine.
*************
*************
But this special star has moved on by.
Looking for a more faithful starry sky.
*************

Yes? the parts of ***** are my additions outside of the poem, not sure if you will like it but, I tried.

Excellent.

5/5

Wonderful job on this. it had a really nice flow. great work. 5/5 keep up the good work.

Great poem...lovely work...i loved the thoughtful use of metaphors...n the poem is good as it is...n i loved the last two lines n m not all that sure about the way it flowed though...but u've certainly done a good job with this one..
Kp writing!
xxPoojaxx