Please Tell Me

by Carmen   Oct 9, 2006


So many days have gone by,
Since I have met the love of my life.
He walked right into my life,
I even hoped someday I would become his wife.

In the beginning it was great,
A girl could not ask for more.
He gave me love, hope, happiness,
And even kisses galore!

After a while he said he loved me,
And I said "I love you, too,"
I thought we would be together forever,
Now I can only wish it true.

Things got shaky,
And all we would do is fight,
He wanted to say goodbye,
But I would not let him out of my sight.

I loved you too much
To ever let you go.
I never wanted you to leave,
I wanted us to grow.

You saw the tears I cried,
And knew how I truly felt,
I needed you with me,
And your doubt started to melt.

Even though we stayed together,
Sometimes you still want to leave.
The truth is all I want,
So please tell me...
Do you love me,
As much as I do you?
Do you think of me day and night,
Is this love really true?

Honey, I am a strong girl,
This you should know...
I have had my heart broken before,
But I still continue to grow.

I would rather be alone,
Then with a guy who does not care.
Why waste my time with you,
If you are not even wanting to be there?

Tell me how you feel,
Please just let me see.
Do not worry about my feelings,
Just please tell me.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Letty

    This poem was sweet, but I couldn't really get into it because of the copy and paste errors. Also in this poem the rhyming is kind of cliche'. It's like I new what your next line would be before I read it and because of those two errors it kind of knocked the flow off track. I still think that it was a good poem, it just needs a few adjustments. 5/5

    Letty

  • 18 years ago

    by Bridgette

    Awww... I absolutely loved this poem! Especially these lines:
    Even though we stayed together,
    Sometimes you still want to leave.
    Those just made me want to cry! I also love how it started out being sad and then you showed your strength in it. It just gave the poem a nice little twist where the girl doesn't seem like she's going to die if he leaves. You did an amazing job on this! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    Nice job. There were just a few things that I need to point out:

    "So many days have gone by,
    Since I have met the love of my life.
    He walked right into my life..."

    The repitition of 'life' here makes this stanza sound awkward. If you change it somewhere then something else might help it to flow better.

    "Things got shaky,
    And all we would do is fight,
    He wanted to say goodbye,
    But I would not let him out of my sight."

    This doesn't really have that natural flow through it. The last line ruins it. If you cut it down it might sound better. Maybe if you said something like, "But I kept him in my sight."...?

    Good work, anyway.

  • 18 years ago

    by Minkus

    Nice job, 5/5. I could tell it was very heartfelt. There's a strong element of truth in it: sometimes it's better to tell someone the the truth that hurts now than to tell them the lie that hurts later.

  • 18 years ago

    by Karma Hope

    This is such a nice peice of work here, made my heart go out for the girl, very nice way to get the reader to feel the emotions too...

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