Lot's of emotions in there...and the end ties it all together...great job...
auna

Wow this is really good. full of emotion and it's very dark too. excellent job on it. keep writing! 5/5

~Kristina

Your poems are so emotional that is why they are so great. i luv ur poems, 5/5

You have a nice way of scribbling down your thoughts, its kinda a story telling with a twist of poetry, which is nice.
k.k.

misstress

U r a excellent writer keep it up 5/5

Woah! I love the emotians in this poem! And the words used make it really great! Its great piece! Keep it up! xx

Great word usage and emotion captured in this peice! I enjoyed reading it. & thought you could be inproved in places but thats what makes it original.
Great work [: