Comments : 1,000 miles away

  • 17 years ago

    by Suicide With A Smile

    "when I'm without you
    I can't help but think about you" That sounds a bit rocky...

    "and when you're here
    I just want to disappear" I love that part

    "you led me to your heart
    but didn't give me the key" You might want to say "The key in" it sounds good with the flow of the poem