Battle

by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere   Oct 11, 2006


**READ:: This poem is in memory of my brother David. He vanished and we're afriad he has died. The begining is what he had as his song to keep him going. SO IF YOU DONT LIKE IT DONT COMMENT ON IT~**

Battle

The Strength like a Tiger
The Muscles like a Soldier
The Words like a Priest
The Wheelbarrel like a Farmer
The Garden like a Edlerly
The Forgiveness like a Amish Family
The Eyes like a Eagle
The Love like a Mother
The Praising like a Follower
To make it all through
Carry on til' we must rest
We must keep ourselves together
And react immeaditly when we have been attacked
We shall not fall
And cry of our wounds
We must drag ourselves to battle
Til' our wounds infect
And our bodies give up
We must stay strong
And battle our war
We cannot give up so easily
We must show who we are
We must hush our words
And bellow out our song
'The Strength like a Tiger
The Muscles like a Soldier
The Words like a Priest
The Wheelbarrel like a Farmer
The Garden like a Edlerly
The Forgiveness like a Amish Family
The Eyes like a Eagle
The Love like a Mother
The Praising like a Follower
To make it all through'
We must push ourselves through
This time of war
Battles against battles
Guns roar in our ears
We cannot give up
Til' the other one dies
On this battlefield!

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  • 18 years ago

    by Ashla

    GREAT! I LOVE THIS POEM. AND IM SORRY YOUR BROTHER WENT MISSING.

    I LOVE YOU SIS!
    ASHLA

  • 18 years ago

    by A Christoffer

    That was an excellent song! it really had a good flow to it and i have a beat in my head that would fit perfectly for it! great write! i hope u find ur bro! 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by CourtneyLouxxx

    Nice xxx
    comment back would ya?
    please and thank u

  • 18 years ago

    by Dumpstead

    Good job; ). It could have been much better if you had spent more time I guess.

    Your concept is good , but again I see that your words are vell not so smooth. The flow is okay, it is neither good nor bad. I think you had to pay more attention to the center of the poem.Somewhere in the below four lines your flow got a punch in the stomach.

    We must keep ourselves together
    And react immeaditly when we have been attacked
    We shall not fall
    And cry of our wounds

    Also be careful of spelling and grammer before you post,

    The Garden like a Edlerly ?? I think it is Elderly and even then what has garden got to do with battle?

    Do not use words just for the sake of sounding good, use only words that express exactly what you feel.

  • 18 years ago

    by Michael D Nalley

    This is a very intense poem iI am sure it would inspire courage and confidence in a soldier