by Paige Victoria Oct 11, 2006
category :
Sadness, depression /
grieving, loss
Pull the lid over my eyes, |
The emotion behind this peom is very strong...i think it could be better though. heres some constructive critisism: i would suggest trying to make this one rhyme only because the first two lines do and it just seemed that the rest, therefore should as well. Also try and work on the wording.. at times its a bit awkward. All in all, this is a good poem. I just think a re-write would be good. |