When i die

This is a beautifully written piece. Nobody likes to think about their death but nobody wants people to mourn them either.

Again a few more stanza's would have been great but you say enough in the few that you've written.

Well done

5/5

This could have been a real good peice you had alot of options with it but I think you really lost out on the opportunity to really make this piece shine. The message was kinda weak from the start and had not really enough to let the reader get involved. Plot121

I really like this poem a lot!!!!!! you are a very good writer!!!!!5/5 love always linda

Wow, I liked this poem, but it was very short, perhaps make it a bit longer, I was just getting into it and then it stoped. Other than that it was well written.

Peace, Joe

Awww! This is a really sad poem! But still i really liked it! Good rhyming. Thanks for commenting on my poems. xx