Cannabalism {Double Ottava Rima}

by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex   Oct 11, 2006


Swimming around, everywhere, blood sets, displaced,
((Chunks)), indescribable matter on the ground,
With a difficult decision you are faced.
Push harder, deeper, more, let your heart resound.
Decide your fate quickly, enjoy the taste.
Listen gently to your screams fall to the ground.
Piece by piece, taste by taste, you'll eat your flesh,
Falling deep within a sleep; your final rest.

Feast upon flesh, so delicate and great,
Breaking skin by teeth - smell the smell so strong,
Cannibalism is your scrumptious fate.
Blood dripping down your face; this can't be wrong,
Looking up at victims with utter hate
For their flesh in your mouth is where it belongs.
Lying around you are skin and broken bones,
Laugh as you break the flesh; hear their final moan.

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  • 17 years ago

    by Ashleigh Skye

    Wow this was really good I liked everything about it. It kind of reminded me of Silence of the lambs. What I liked the most was how you managed to make the whole thing sound so inticing(sp?) but as you realised what you were talking about it became very freaky. I got kind of drawn into it. Well done.

  • 18 years ago

    by dollwithafrown

    One word: creepy.

    But overall you handled this topic very well indeed. As vulgar as the situation you are writing about is, you captured the emotions, the hatred and the physical effects very well.

    "Listen gently to your screams fall to the ground."

    This line sounded kind of... off? I think it would sound better if it said something such as:

    "Listen gently AS your screams fall to the ground."

    or

    "Listen gently to your screams falling to the ground."

    Anyway, very good work. 5/5.

  • 18 years ago

    by ALEX

    Well that's the creepiest poem i've ever read. umm.. congratulations?

    but seriously.. very nicely written. i'm hoping this isn't from experience!!!

  • 18 years ago

    by Arcane Blondie

    Good poem---The flow is on target and your word choice is perfect. The only thing that doesn't make this poem one of my favorites is that it doesn't seem to have the depth that a lot of your pieces have---Still, great work----5/5

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