U just descried the life
what can u do ? just deal with it
good work

Hmmm, this poem had me thinking, it was really good to see you to put yourself fully in there shoes and tell a story with this poem. Great work..
Karms.

Thought provoking piece.
Ive enjoyed reading it..
5/5

What a nice story poem hehe... well keep it up i give it 5/5 i know this is nice

god bless

Amazing write!
it was a good poem!
sad but amazing!
keep it up!

Wow. This seems like a version of my poem 'Just Me,' but with a lot more detail put into it. It's great! I loved it! ^_^ It had so much emotion, and you did a great job on saying how it would be like. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

This poem was well thought out and has a powerful content. if i was your editor this is what I would do with it

Trying to scream
for help; calling for someone
to pick my lifeless body up.
No one can save me from
this problem, a problem I‘m
always trying to fix.

Time and time again
I go through everyday
feeling like a huge
mess that doesn’t belong.

Trying to make myself
fit into their world,
a world where everyone
is loved; not pushed
aside just because of
size.

Having such a low-esteem
about myself; no matter
what I try, I keep
being a fat mess.
Going through all
these ideas in my
head, telling me I
must become like them.

Would do anything just to become a hottie, even
If I have to put my
life at risk. I’m going
under, under a world of
pain.

Thinking it was ok,
ok to miss a meal
but then it became two meals
and so on...
Couldn’t help myself
from doing it.

Now I keep feeling so
week, so week I cant
even stand up, falling down to
many times a day.
Everyone can notice
that there is something
wrong with me.

I have fallen for the
last time. Can’t feel
nothing no more, all I can
do is to see everyone looking
at me in the floor.
Trying so hard to scream for
help but I cant.
I can hear my heart
beating less and less.....
Now I ‘m dead, I have become
a ghost. I’m hovering
over my dead body
seeing a lifeless body
and my parents and
doctors around me.
Hearing the last words
Ill ever hear " Your Child was Anorexic"

First off I'd like to say that this is a very powerful and emotional poem. I could picture the htings you sad happening, the not eating and then finally the consequence. Second I'd like to say I'm sorry that you had to go through that, it's very hard and I want you to know that I'm here if you ever need to talk. 5/5

lots of love
*~*Becky*~*

Wow...thts sad...but i liked the poem though..keep on writing!

This poem is hot i give u a 5/5

Wow....really sad poem; this is one of those topics that is really hard to write about, but you did a great job with it. It caught my attention at the beginning and held it the whole way through---Great write! 5/5 Stay Strong, hun =D

I can defiantly relate to this poem. excellent jon on it! 5/5

~Kristina

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