Everything Is Wrong

I loved it...5/5...excellnt job putting your emotions into this poem...

"When will I be saved?
Is this life or just a game?
I'm falling apart so fast,
Please tell me all this pain won't last."

i love that part...i can definitly relate.

and yes...my poem the objects of your stares is true...actually the girl i wrote about in it is myself...thanks for the comments.

Good poem---The emotion is very clear throughout the piece and the title definately caught my eye. My only criticism is that the flow is choppy in a few places...nothing major though. Once again, great read---5/5

Aw hun, i hope your alright. I guess we are alike in some things, because i can relate alot to your poems. I have felt like this too. Keep up the great writing. 5/5

Oh, you poor thing. Not everything can go right, but not everything is wrong. Things must happen for a reason, we all know that. We just don't exactly put it in our heads that something could happen every second of the day. Just keep that chin up. =)

The poem...The flow was good, and the descriptions were well done. Keep it up, and keep a positive attitude. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Aww that's such a sad poem. But another amazing poem. Luv Nicole =)