So hard...

by RachelAnne   Oct 12, 2006


Just think about it,
no throwing a fit,
a simple question
no more do not forget

could it be easy?
or is it just cheesy,
nothing to please me,
oh could it be?

listen this way,
and do not play,
coz he will leave you one day,
and go so far away

he said he loved you,
and he said its true,
but now that he left you life is now blue.

why is there pressure?
and can you be sure
why can you not be ' her '
do you feel immature

breaking your heart
pieces fall apart
everything from the start
you feel like you will depart

kissing your tears
he tells you good-bye
bringing back the fears
just wanting to get high

now you see its so hard
when your heart goes to shards
its nothing to think is out so far
he may just do this final apart

-Rachel..

ahh i dont like this really but rate how you would like

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  • 18 years ago

    by Purple

    I'm giving you my most common down gradding comment. Most of the poem was good, but a few parts were 'chunky'. Meaning, not as smooth as the rest. Overal thoug, it was a good poem with good rhythem and a pritty consistent subject. One other thing that bothered me was the word cos. That's not a word, it's not even part of a word. It would of been better if you put 'cause, that is part of a word.

    Even if I ignore that, I had a hard time consintrating on your poem, actually the words weren't staying together on the screen so I should of probably stopped and waited a bit then came back, but I didn't. I'll give you a 4/5 for a good poem with a few flaws.

    Keep writting, I didn't say you were horrible because that wouldn't of been true.

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