The one who cares

by Brittany C   Oct 12, 2006


Worn,
Cold,
Torn in two,
Like a piece of paper you just torn in two,
Your patents spread to thin,

Tired of old,
Afraid of new,
Angry,
At what some people decide to do,

Lonely,
Misunderstood,
By all those around you,
But you still care,
You care when others don't,

You see the good in others,
Even when you don't see the good in yourself,
And when no one else is willing to open their eyes,
And see you for who you are,
Instead for what you wear,

You care about the world,
And all living things on her,
You are the one that cares,
Though no one notices,
You try to protect the innocent,
You're the one that cares even when others do not.

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  • 16 years ago

    by Kitten

    I also agree that the second staza was the strongest the poem has a great message to it you just need to work a little on how you get that message across

  • 17 years ago

    by Vanessa

    I agree that the second staza was the strongest, the flow was a little off but the emtion was right on, aand the word choice was great. I liked the message in this one, keep up the good work.5/5

  • 17 years ago

    by xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex

    Your patents spread to thin,
    ((First of -paitence- and second off -spreads- sounds better.))

    Not a bad poem, but I didn't feel much emotion in it. The flow was a little off, however your second stanza was your strongest and very well written. Nicely done.

    xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex5.5

  • 17 years ago

    by Fazolis

    Gosh this is aswomeness i love it.

  • 17 years ago

    by Darien

    Hmm, you sort of repeated the same thing, and I didn't really like that. Again, I liked the ideas, but I think you can express them better. Don't worry, as a young poet, you learn and you get better. Keep on writing.

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