Awhh.. Sweetie that was so sad.. You really got into the mind of a homeless person and wrote as if this was what your life was like.. The flow was pretty good as were the descriptions. Nicely done 5/5

A very sad poem indeed You had drawn a great picture here This is an art from you a master piece great job I love it

Just the I's Again

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Geneross

Wow, i've never seen a poem written on this topic before. It's very sad, and it's terrible to think that this is really what happens in the world. A great write. 5/5

I think poem will be well suited under poems about life. Really well done! I really liked how you put yourself in someone elses shoes and took on their role. You are a talented writer. Keep it up.

You are definately a really talented writer. This poem was wonderful and so very sad. You have a way of expressing your emotions and thats what makes your poetry wonderufl to read. Great flow, nicely done. These two stanza's would have to be my favorite:

"I used to have hopes and dreams
I used to have friends
But now, it seems
I pray my life to end.

My clothes are filthy
My hair is full of dirt
And every single day
I am in emotional hurt."

Those lines really got to me. Don't ever stop writing. 5/5

--Angie xoxo

I really like this poem it some thing i have been through.its hard to live like that.you've done good keep up the work

I thought it was really touching and you did a great job of decribing the feelings and emotions of someone like that 5/5 keep up the good worK!

*Danni*

My heart is sadend by the way you feel. Life is overwelming hence our tears. I feel like giving up aswell! But I hold on for what? I hold on or I'll never know!

I love this one ... it can be taken two ways .. i could be the way some one may feel as if they are homeless because of the way they are treated or some one actually in this sitution