Game of death

by Flaminia   Oct 12, 2006


Down,
from the cliff of my existence,I fall
rapidly,fast,
feel my skin
tears apart,
deep down,
the world's subconscious penetrates me.
I feel dizzy
head hurts,
feel the end,
near,
so close.
My hair rip away,
my face totally deformed,
the pressing of the velocity with which I'm falling
pulses my brain.
Feet touch the earth beneath me.
I feel it.
Opened eyes.
Now I'm prepared to die.
I know know
how I'll feel
when I fall.

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  • 18 years ago

    by Sweet lig

    Great! just continue writing i know u can write more suh like this.... very great poem of yours keep it up5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by just a little girl

    I look foreward to reading more of your poems when they come, this was my favourite as im scared of the fall before death xxx

  • 18 years ago

    by Tammie

    Very well written. Your descriptive words helped create clear imagery, telling a unique story. Overall, a great write. Hope to see more from you. =] Thanks for your comment. Keep up the good work. 5/5

  • 18 years ago

    by Jessica

    Wow, its very good. I like how you used your descriptive words, very well written I rate you 5!

  • 18 years ago

    by ALEX

    Interesting... how it's all thought fragments. Pretty cool structure. Sort of scary. You can understand how they are feeling, falling. Scared. Great job!

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