WoW now this was very good hope u keep on writing poems like this, 5/5

Interesting... how it's all thought fragments. Pretty cool structure. Sort of scary. You can understand how they are feeling, falling. Scared. Great job!

Wow, its very good. I like how you used your descriptive words, very well written I rate you 5!

Very well written. Your descriptive words helped create clear imagery, telling a unique story. Overall, a great write. Hope to see more from you. =] Thanks for your comment. Keep up the good work. 5/5

I look foreward to reading more of your poems when they come, this was my favourite as im scared of the fall before death xxx

Great! just continue writing i know u can write more suh like this.... very great poem of yours keep it up5/5