AWWWWW this is so sad!

Be strong...And keep writing...you are really talented...

Lysette x x x

Really deep...
Your,expressions.are.kind.of.unique...
I.mean...keep.like.that!!!

Dont worry about a thing cuz every little things gonna be alright!!! ok yea if this happened to you i feel much apathy. im sry but plz be happy

Wow, a very sad and painful poem to read. It had very strong emotions in this one and it made it unbelievably more great. Loved it, the poem had great flow and imagery to it. 5/5 Keep writing.

Oh yeah, sry for commenting on the other poem twice, it was an accident.

Stephanie

Heyy cyber husband! =]]

This was an awesome poemm. Your profound thinking is amazing and your talent is a joy to see. I loved the metaphors you put in this, they made it so unique and added you could say a certain flavor to it. The flow was good but I do still think it could be improved with a rhyme scheme. Other than that, absolutely amazing hun. Keep up the great work! 5/5

Once again, a wonderful write, everything seemed to flow great, except for one thing...

"Now suffer with these tears you shed for him"

I think it would sound better if you got rid of "for him" i was reading it and I thought that it really didn't flow with that in there.

Other than that, Awesome Job.

Ciao, Joe

U trully r a unique writter, ur style is very differnt. i love it

You really do have a way with words. I adored the language of the 2nd stanza especially although the whole piece was well executed.
The imagery is great and paints a vivid though terrible picture.

I loved this.
It was so sad yet original and creative.
The wording was, as always, excellent.
And the imagery blew me away.
5/5