Comments : Don't let go.

  • 18 years ago

    by LadyPearl

    Good start, the main thing you need to focus on is your spelling and grammar. They may seem like small stuff, but it helps the readers a lot.

    "your" should be "you're"
    "your the one who turned this frown upside down" I like this line, but it doesn't completely make sense.

    Keep on writing