WOW Lawrence..I loved it...the beginning was so sad..but THEN...the brilliant ending in which you stop the pity train(not making fun!! been on it several times myself!!!!) and go out and make it happen...kick Loneliness out and all that..I love that by the way, the way you've used Lonliness as a person, done that a couplea times myself!!! Da*n woman wont leave me alone lately!!!! Keeps comin back, but I'll keep givin her the boot!!! like a child..feeding me the potion..your analogies are so good...keep em comin!!! great job Lar...Luv Michelle :)

Hey Lawrence, I loved that poem! The last bit really made me think, thank you, you're very talented and I've just read all of your poems and they're all great, :D
Natalie..x.x.x...*",)

Ur really talented man...That was Awesome

WOW!!! Your poem is amazing. I love it so much. How do you write like that. You're very talented! I love the way you explain your feelings, but not exact to the point. I can also releate to it very much!