Wow, your poems really inspire me, you have a unique talent with the words and always bring out great messeges to your readers, great job once again sir........5/5

Very true.

When will we wake up from this nightmare that we made in exchange to safisty man's endless greed.

"All of God's children need to be made aware"

I agree, regardless of what religion we are in...we are still standing/moving in one direction, to freedom,love and trust of course.

Not really into the whole god thing,but it was a really good poem still. =]
you defintily have talent.
--lexie

This is different and quite true. Today's society with new toxic technologies is quickly grabbing the minds and bodies of people and turning them into something awful.
Only critisism I have is in the last stanza the flow is inhibited by the jump in syllable count and wordiness. I realise you weren't following a count as such, but keeping similar meter and counts throughout aids the flow.
Thanks for sharing.

Awsome poem 5/5

Wow, great poem -- i really like the message, it's dead on. If you get a chance stop by and read my poem.
-peace-

I really liked the first two lines; they had a very strong poetic element to them. Though the rest of the poem was good, the phrasing and rhythym might have been a little awkward in a few places (especially here: "Designer drugs to control the scoffing skeptic
Bio warfare for which there is but one antiseptic"-- I would suggest counting syllables to make sure that they match up; there are two extra syllables in the second line. I liked the alliteration though.) Now that I really look in-depth into it, I would give it a 5, but I've already voted. ;( My bad. Great job, though.

Forgot to include this in my other comment: I liked the message a lot.

I really feel this poem is unfinished, maybe just a little two liner to polish off and leave the reader with a question as to what we should do.

I also thought the transition in the third stanza from bio-warfare to piety was too to big a jolt, like a grating of gears that you hear three cars over. Did you have to rush the end or did you not get a change to write a second draft?

Aside from that I still like where this is going and your intentions of the message even if I feel it is not quite finished just yet.

Bret