Comments : Betrayal

  • 18 years ago

    by cutytothebuty

    I really liked the poem...so sorry you and your friend are not friends anymore

  • 14 years ago

    by Lemma

    I really love the punchy finality of the last 2 lines, they really convey the feeling of anger and hurt that is felt throughout the poem. The only thing that I picked up on that might be improved is the first line of the 3rd stanza, most of your first lines are a little longer syllable-wise and the short line disrupts the flow a little. I could be wrong though, that might have been the effect you were going for.

    Overall great write, 5/5

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