Wow that poem just grabbed me u know.. it had so much feeling to it and the words and ideas u had in it were amazing. i loved how you repeated "i love you" at the end, and i think what would make it even better would be if you used kirstens idea. Because then it's like its fading away, and that somehow (i dont quite know how to say it) would well like seem more strong, and suck the reader in even more and maybe even give them goosebumps! lol i hope u understand what i mean!! 5/5 :D

That poem was amazing, it really caught my interest 5/5

I really REALLY like your way of writing. =]
style is unique and as i said, reminds of james frey. but that book is fantastic so thats def a compliment!!! =]

In THe End this could be a very broad term and the usage of the thought could be grand, but I found it rather dissapointing, I was really hoping for some Apocoliptic thought or something like that but just an end of a relationship well hmmm what can I say Plot121

Wow that was really good. many can relate.