To serve the servants

by Rocky   Oct 15, 2006


We do but serve the servants
through our own free will
to blind to see
the personality we kill
too blind to wonder
if were free
or if we could ever
ever be a me

they've enslaved our souls
with there laws they bring
there crystallized morality
is there evil
is our king
though even now
we profess not to see
just what our own stupidity
has led us to be

so shall there be no escaping
their jail of lies
our souls torture
at being commercialized
at being replaced by rituals
as we damn our only life
while our soul
which has withered
now slowly dies

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  • 17 years ago

    by Robert

    I gave this poem a five I loved the meaning behind it, there were a few spelling issues but for the most part Yoy did well. Question after you wrote this you had a big smile on your face? I think you did am I right Plot121

  • 17 years ago

    by Kelsea

    I think this one is amazing. Good job

  • 17 years ago

    by twisted reality

    =S

    I don't really know what to say about this one. I didn't fully understand it. Even after I read it through twice. I'm sorry if I didn't quite catch a metaphor that you were trying to portray, but I just didn't see it. I apologise.

    But what I can comment you on is the beautifully worded stanzas. They were wonderful. They had such passion and emotion in every word put together. Do NOT change the stanzas lol. They're like...perfect. =P I really liked the stanzas. As for the rest, I have no idea what to comment on. I apologise, once again. =) 5/5 xoxo

    Samantha

  • 18 years ago

    by Courtney

    THIS ONE FREAKIN ROX! BEAUTIFUL!

  • 18 years ago

    by christine m

    This was dark- i loved it! I hate that we dont always live the way we want to live- and in a way live the way people expect us to- thats what i got from this- maybe thats just what im feeling today lol good job.. ur free to red mine as well- they might be a little twisted

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