I dont know if this is how you wanted the theme of this poem to be but i see it as a funny poem.. the !'s have a big part in this along with the tendancy of simple language.. it makes it seem slightly childish-therefore funny.. but as a funny type poem its very good.. but i dont know if that means much if it isnt..
4/5

x.x:Lauren

Hey it fits under funny poems.. haha i didnt look., but that^^ is your comment. =]