Hrmmm it was well written, but needed to be longer, I felt you didn't end it, I was reading and then it just stoped. the flow was ok, but needs work. other than that good job.

Peace, Joe

Very good job on this one. You had a good flow and a great selection of vocabulary. The only complaint I have is that I think that it should be a tad bit longer. 5/5 Keep it up!

Stephanie