This is a sad piece,
kinda a short story with a twist of poetry..
the message I'll have to ponder once again..
Truly for sure many out there can relate to this poem,
and Im one of those..

Oh that was sad, but yet greatly written......5/5

Aww i really liek this poemm... good job.. and sooo sad... :(

Aww i really liek this poemm... good job.. and sooo sad... :(

I really like this

u should send it to poetry.com

its perfect

cool...*

Oh wow. Just wow. I almost cried. Excellent.

Very good, Your poem is amazing! My favorite lines are:
The light came from a black pick- up truck
Full of high and drunken teens.

But before the driver made its impact
The passenger let out a horrible scream

All the while awaiting her faith
Little Lisa decided to pray

That God would keep her parents together
And that she would see them again one day.

After the truck hit little twelve year old Lisa,
It killed her instantly.

The pick-up truck then swerved off the road
And ran into a sycamore tree.

There were no survivors that terrible night
Their location was lighted by the moon.

Lisa parents discovered the terrible tragedy
From watching the early morning news.

They both denied it was Lisa
In their hearts they prayed they were right.

But the call came in from forensics
proving that it was Lisa that died that night.
This was my favortie part!
Great Job!
5/5

Oh no im so sad after reading this poem... very wonderful emotion i can feel the sadness.. the story behind this,,, i think it is really true! anothet great job5/5

This was an amzing poem!!!
it was soo sad... made me wanna cry...
overall... the poem was amazing...
the words you used were great...
and the poem flowed all the way to the end...
keep it up!

I think this one is the best of three. It really hit me and it’s so miserable. The emotions are well explained and the situation is well known, there are many families like Lisa’s. And that makes it extra sad.
Luckily, Lisa’s ‘task’ is fulfilled, so the poem is more then a lesson. 5/5

I think this one is the best of three. It really hit me and it’s so miserable. The emotions are well explained and the situation is well known, there are many families like Lisa’s. And that makes it extra sad.
Luckily, Lisa’s ‘task’ is fulfilled, so the poem is more then a lesson. 5/5

I cant believe how good this was this is your best so far i loved it so much it was like a gripping story. well done one of the best poems i have read on this site xxx alexxxx

I like this 1 its realy sad