I like the idea. The idea of repeating the first line of each stanza is very unique. Keep it up!

Hey i'll contribute. i hope you prove your friend wrong:) good luck. anyway great poem i loved the detailing. take care

I liked your poem very much! 5/5

Oh wow! excellent...i totally loved it...5/5.

Sorry computer won't let me vote.

Well, it was ok. but i think you should put more. and well, it's kinda ok, just maybe, umm, practice more and be better. but i really like it. tell him that even tho u don't get 100 votes ur still trying. or/and just watever

Wow this was good.
short but good.
you have some reall talient.