Wow.. I usually hate Haikus, I will not lie, but this is very good. Try using different descriptions rather than color, next time. It will bring more life to the poem. Please, do not get mad at my suggestion.

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xTheEcstasyOfSuicidex 5.5

P.S. I want to thank you so much for always coming by and rating my poems... I never said thank you, but to know you love all of them enough to do that means the world to me... Thank you. Sheena

They're both good, but I must say; I like the first one better. I like how the theme of 'threes' runs through the poem.

Excellent!

Oh I like this Haiku. Usually I don't like this style, cuz it seems as if people just throw words together that are the correct syllables, but this one didn't seem like that. =) Well done. 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

Short, yet beautiful. I like it a lot. No many people to me can write good haiku's, yet this one was very good! 5/5 Keep up the great work!

Innoc3ntStar

Good job, the second line was the best. The third line didn't really match. Keep it up

I like this, and the way it expresses every-thing, and coincidentally i agree, my poems are usually better when they have lots of meaning, or deep emotion, but i can't always write dark poetry!! but i am sure you could, just from reading this!!! it is very good!!

These were both good but I'm not sure why you have a rewrite. They both have the right syllable counts. Anyways, nice descriptions used and good imagery. Nice job 5/5

5/5. I like the re-write! Love it. Great write~

I LIKED THE SECOND ONE MUCH MORE! once again totally dumb about haikus,
-Ann