I liked the second verse! It was the first one that didn't flow as well... Great job over all and i like your metaphor!! Keep writing!

xxEvilAngelxx

Hmm...out of 3 or 4 people i know that have read this poem you are the first to say you like the second verse...lol...even i dont like it...=P

thanks again for the comments

Very nice. I liked it. Thank you very much for the comments it was greatly apreicated.5/5

God Bless,
Taylor

I like all the verses goodjob!!!

That's a rockin poem!! Har Har. Man I'm bored at home alone. =)

Perhaps u should have gone to school...dumb dumb dummy head :)