This poem has got a weird vibe for me, don't get me wrong I appreciate and enjoyed reading it thoroughly because of this weird vibe I got. I felt like I was reading something written by a poet a hundred years ago, your use of language, your beautiful choice of words just added to the effect. :o) Great work

Incredible choice of language and imagery I cfelt as though I could have been reading somthing done by the masters of yesterday a very real yet dreamlike quality. I will be back to read more of your work.
Tim

Wow! i loved it! great flow and word usage...well done.

I like your imagery,but you seem to break the rhyming a lot,in places when I think you should keep it.Just as the pictures charm me, your rhyming and meter(that's what we call it in greek,I don't know if it's the same in english) change and my picture gets blown away.I don't understand why you "cut" the words too,made it hard for me to understand and go on.
I don't know if it's good to say these stuff,but I hope you see it as my simple opinion.Keep it up :)