The End Of Her Fate

by xxEvilAngelxx   Oct 18, 2006


A girl lays still,
On the cold, hard ground.
She's overwhelmed
With life that surrounds.

Her stresses are rising,
They don't hesitate.
And when they peak,
It will end her fate.

Time does go on,
She has no conscious choice.
When she jumps in the lake,
Unheard is her voice.

They examined her body,
But nothing was found.
No one will know,
It was her mind that drowned.

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  • 16 years ago

    by SuicideNotes2Poems

    It is great! loved it. keep up the good work. =]

  • 16 years ago

    by XxShadowxOfxYourxShadowxXMyxMiNdxIsxFrOzEnxX

    This is amazing...I loved it...
    great job...

  • 18 years ago

    by goddess-glamourpuss

    I loved the ending of this one. The pace was fast and almost frenzied which ids how I picture the scene. Very nice deep write.

  • 18 years ago

    by Darien

    The ending is good, the rhymes were nice. there is nothing i would change in this poem!

  • 18 years ago

    by TheWorldFellNUWerentThere

    5/5. I LOVED THE ENDING! It is so great! I hope you write more!

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