Purple Lips Upon A Wedding Corpse

Wow I really liked this one it kind of reminded me of a horror movie where the good guy/girl is about to kiss the one whos lips are made of poision because they are in a trance and think its the right thing to do when everyone else is screaming at them to back away. I really liked this poem, I think that you did a great job at capturing the emotions within it. What I really liked was how you made me feel intranced by the purple lips but also a little bit worried about what would happen. Nice job.

That was really, really good.

There's just two things that caught my eye:

"A distorted love so pressious..."

I'm presuming you meant "precious"?

The very last line was good. I know you ended it that way for added effect, however it seems a little out of place, due to how long it is in comparison to the other lines.

A good poem none the less.

Wow x 8509238058220385028!!!

that is the most eye catching title i have ever seen. you're a very creative person, aren't you?

Gee willigers! That was amazing. I loved every bit of it. But in there, there was one line..

"A distorted love so pressious, so valued,"

Should it be "Precious" instead? That's what I thought, unless that is a new word for me lol. But, I loved this poem as well. Keep it up.

5/5

-Jenna.

The first thing that caught my eye was the title, as others have said. It's eye-capturing. This poem is very well written. The vocab used throughout is excellent and created a descriptive piece. Great write. Keep it up. =] 5/5