by Ashley Ann
I LOVE the point that you are putting across! You have such talent! The only thing I recommend is that you read it aloud to yourself. There were some spelling errors or extra words. If you read it aloud to yourself you will catch those errors a lot better. 5/5 |
Great write its like a story that i see unfolding infront of me as i read osm job 5/5 |
With the pain that tares |
by Robert
This was a great poem at first it sound kinda whiny but as you read through it the message was right there bam in your face great job keep up the great work Plot121 |
Good job.. the flow was a bit off but still another great poem filled with a lot of strong emotion |