Short but it conveys a lot of emotions.
Ive enjoy reading this one..

I liked this one too, it showed so much more than just the words, it had a lot of depth.

This is a great poem
only thing would be to try and make it longer
you have a good subject on ure hands
all you need to do is detail it
and it would be Awesome
but from what you have
you did a great job
5/5
~MF~

Sweet poem. Short but great. The only this i'd take a look into would be adding a bit of punctuation maybe, or even possibly adding some detail. But other then that, amazing write! Keep up the awesome work! 5/5

--Angie xoxo

Great Job! Usually I choose which lines I like the best but I love them all! Your rhyming was excellent, in the few places there was some. Great Job!
5/5

Nice job on this one; I felt your want for something more than what you have and I think you conveyed the feeling quite well. 5/5.

Short but an excellent poem... i know the feeling, wonderful job conveying the need for something more... i can almost hear you pleading with him... great job 5/5

Aww beautifuly written. but it was sad too. i know how it feels though. if you need to talk i'm here for you. great write! 5/5

~Kristina