Hollow eyes of beauty

by Sorefromreality   Oct 19, 2006


I look in the mirror everyday
i guess I'm expecting something to change
my body to morph, or my face to rearrange

but out of everything i see
one specific thing always bothers me
i stare at my eyes,waiting for the sparkle
but they aren't something magnificent, or some true marvel

they simply sit there,
staring back at me
without a special twinkle
so i just let them be

i just cant understand
how eyes can be windows to the soul,
when mine are so plain,
does this mean i have no soul?

i cant see that special something
tucked deep inside
i call for it to come out
but it continues to hide

is it really hiding,
or is it just not there,
not that it really bothers me,
i don't really care

but if i cant see it
in these simple circles of brown,
what will anyone else ever see,
in my hollow eyes of beauty

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  • 17 years ago

    by Phantompixie

    It was good
    but I didnt really like how you rhymed
    "soul" with "soul"

  • 18 years ago

    by Tripp

    Like the others said, this is a very unique poem...the subject is something I doubt I've read anywhere else, which makes it good :). Unique = good. Or in this case, very good. I liked the talk of eyes being the window to your soul, yet yours are plain...very deep.

    good job, keep it up

  • 18 years ago

    by Purple

    The third and last stanza's rhyming scheme seemed a litttle off, but besides that it was good. Go through the atomatic list of flow, rythem, ryhm, connectoin to reader, emotoin, meaning, consistency... You did good.

    I'm going to give you a 4/5 because of those two little chinks, but that's pritty good on my scale.

    I'd apreaite a comment back, but it's not required.

    ~Purple~

  • 18 years ago

    by Tammie

    The title caught my eye, which is always a good thing. The topic is unique, and i like the meaning you put into this poem. How you worked in the title to the ending of the poem made the ending stronger, a very good write. Keep it up hun. =] 5/5

    Love,
    Tammie xo

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