Wow, Noni. Very nicely written! Beautiful imagery as per usual. Nothing I would change! Keep it up! 5/5

Natalie``

Wow! I didn't expect that at all... Well, I didn't expect that until I realized that you are Forbiddeneyes. lol, I've read your stuff before and I don't think I've ever really disliked a piece. Anyway, I don't like rating, mostly because I feel as if I give out fives too willingly to people that I'm familiar with; however I feel you deserve it for this one. I think the strongest part of this write was the first stanza: your imagery and words were wonderful. I loved this part especially, because the wording of it added character to your description (and character is always the best way to put a part of yourself into the piece):

"While a smile; such a sweet smile,
Painted upon plump, young cheeks."

Really great write from you. I don't think you should worry about downvoters; if you get any they're not worth fretting over... *sigh* this vote system could be cool if people stayed honest and open.

Yes i agree with ...Me... i loved:

While a smile; such a sweet smile,
Painted upon plump, young cheeks

very good description that part and dont worry about down voters, i gave it a 5 :)

Ooo. I like the whole meaning of this poem. It really brings out a lot of real life things and issues that children have to face.

[Throughout time this rope swung,
Like a pendulum of a clock.]
^^My favourite two lines. These really let me imagine what it looked like in my head, instead of having no description at all and then having to guess. Well done. =) 5/5 xoxo

Samantha

I liked the playing around with 5 lines in the first two versus then going in to 4 on your last this is a unique element of the poem and makes yourself stand out well done xxx alex xxx (3)

Very unique, the title fitted the poem, and it flowed well. couldnt see anything wrong with it. you have a talent, well done
xxxxxxx

I havent seen a poem yet about this. It's very unique, as Tara-Kay said, and i absolutely LOVE unique! The imagery was incredible! It just made me smile as i read the first stanza! wonderful write!

Excellent. I love the last stanza the best.. your beat and rhythm was great in this poem,
Awesome Job Babe!
5/5

Very well written with a beautiful message to it

Arsalan D.

You have My Vote As a 4/5 :)

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