Great as usual!! Loved the flow, and the words used. I think your work speaks for itself though. Its excellent! Keep them up! xx

Wow...I don't usually like poems that don't rhyme, but this was an exception. I liked the imagery used and i thought the flow was good. An enjoyable read.

Correctable errors:

Sunlight shun above hidden trees,

Do you mean shined or shone?

Moon shadows taking it's last toll,

Moon's shadows or Moon shadow's and its, not it's
(The moon's shadow is taking its toll is what I think you mean which would make it Moon's shadow)

I like this poem a lot, but I find it hard to establish exactly what the lies are. The first strike I am clueless about, the second seems to be political and the third appears to infidelity, but even then I'm far from sure.

Is the ambiguity there with purpose, shielding yourself or are you protecting someone else?

Nicely written visual piece.

Bret

Loved it.. seemed vague at first, but ur 2nd stanza connected the dots.. sad poem, but angry and had power and a backbone, if u noe wat i mean..

short, but made a point.. and i loved those lines in between parantheses.. but more i loved the imagery u provided in the first and last stanzas..

keep it up
take care
NannO

p.s. thnx for the comment

Very unique poem, but very well written. I really like it. 5/5
Keep up the great work.

God Bless,
Taylor

Lot of emotion in this very powerful n very well written keep em comin xx

Creative-- not only the meaning itself, but also the endings of each stanza-- the title makes a lot more sense after reading the poem. Nice job! 5/5.

Wow! I love the whole concept of this poem. The strike idea is really unique and stand out from the rest. I love every bit of the poem. My favorite line has to be:

You can't control your heart of lies.

A very well written write! 5/5

Tammie xo

AWESOME poem i loved it. it's really really good. nice work keep it up shanik

Well done Nat, another great poem. Really sad, and it makes me wonder if you're ok. Or you're probably just like me, and write about anything and everything! lol, well hope things are good take care!

Ooh, wow Taleee! This was awesome! I love the phrases written in parenthesis, they are very effective and give the poem its own flavor. The flow was great as was the rhyme scheme. Your descriptions and imagery were amazing. Wonderful work hun 5/5